Angela hated his hobby. She kept saying it was silly and dangerous. Well, it wasn’t. Not if you knew what you were doing and didn’t lose your nerve. He jumped and the air whistled around him. The adrenalin kicked in and he was free.
Gone. It was all gone. The nagging girl-friend, the growing patch of baldness on his crown, the money he’d “borrowed” from the client accounts to pay for his expensive tastes, his lonely childhood, his miserable youth.
And then there was that delicious moment of choice. If he didn’t deploy now, they need never come back again.
The story-challenge. This week’s prompt was: Relaxation.
And do you know the song Skydiving by Jonay?
2 thoughts on “The Moment of Truth”
I like this, you do a good job of encapsulating your character in very little space. I like the melancholy in the character as well, the reader can empathize with the character’s place in life. To me, though, the ‘borrowed’ money feels like a little too much for this piece. I think that it demands a longer story, and that creates a problem with keeping your piece this short.
Thanks for the input.
I’ll think about how it could have been replaced.